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And in this Civ stage one major concern is how to deal with the criminal element that would rise swiftly in such a dystopian future of rebuilding after the massacre of law enforcement personnel across the world. If only there were a head of a criminal organization that was able to work in...

XCOM soldiers get paid in blood, tears, and pain. Also genetic modifications and secondhand MEC suits for some. There is some concern about soldiers continually taking alien body parts as well, and as anyone who watches CommanderOdd's tendency to have clearance sales on alien bodies knows...

I liked it. Lots of hints at personality within a dossier format. I could go into more detail but will just hope your character does not die in the first mission. I want to see how he develops.

I'll just stop your mass justification there and say you asked for a review and first impression. I gave it but it is just my opinion, you don't have to convince me of anything. I just have my preferences when it comes to a literary rp journal, it is always the characters that matter. Good luck.

Your submission is... confusing. I don't have much problem with choosing a transsexual background; however, you immediately run into a number of paradoxes. One... the military doesn't allow transsexuals to join any of the branches of the military currently. Two... "Due to his identity...

The way your application reads, especially in regards towards special gifts and involvement in secret society (EXALT seems likely), personally I'd consider this as a Furies or Annette application. While your wall of text has lots of details about what happened TO her there's not a whole lot of...

Perhaps you might considering privately applying to RP Annette or one of the Furies (who I don't think ANYONE has applied to write for this season yet) who won't possibly become a character you can write about until well after your recovery has happened. Granted, it would take a special...

Dare to dream.

You already know my opinion. But yes, we need more descriptions of your moustache. And be sure to request of CommanderOdd a suitably appropriate moustache for your character and not hide it under a helmet no matter what.

I referenced your application when talking about Grelite's character, Gorfest. Noting the similar perceived point of conflict over their name though it seems to me a rather unlikely point of friction or ostracism unless your last name was actually Hitler or something. I don't think your...

The main thing that I would have wanted to hear about was why Davis wanted to be a pilot at all. As it was your summation started with him fully formed just out of cadet training and heading into the R.A.F. with a singleminded determination to become a pilot. But not one mention of why he had...

I looked and I can't find a thing to really criticize. I tend to prefer a narrative/literary style on the whole but your application is probably the best of the 'military file profiles' I've seen. I look forward to seeing what you create in Season 4 when you are chosen to participate. I...

In a word, your application is dry. It's short at one paragraph, though thankfully not a wall-of-text paragraph, and it gives a pretty barebones outline of qualifications and motivations. While his moment of heroism is helpful, it's hard to say why he would have gotten the attention of the...

An interesting summary of a background with some aspects of personality shown but I think it falls under the heading of 'we will see when we see'. The child-soldier angle is interesting, even though it reminds me mostly of endless numbers of anime plotlines (Gunslinger Girl leaping immediately...

Your application I had read rather in detail awhile back, since you were the one who did the RP for Zhang I read through all your entries for Season 3 as well as tried to get a bead on your new character 'Gorefest'. Later I may send you some PMs regarding Zhang and see if you can give me some...

Not a bad story. Some funny bits of the character's personality displayed, a little disjointed wording at the start but easy enough to pick up on the gist of what you are trying to say, all in all the application seems pretty strong. Some details were a bit glossed over but not really...

Read through your application and I liked parts of it, you had some nice detailing on value as a soldier within an already highly covert operation. The format of the application being literally in the form of an military file strikes me as a touch dry, the use of some of the tropes like a man...

Went through your application and actually I liked parts of it, a nice line of thought behind military history and a nice touch with the recommendation from one of his commanders. But I got no real feel for the character himself, the military file by itself is fairly dry reading. Does a good...

Okay, read your application. Three things struck me right off the bat. 1) Rule 7 says: Unless you apply to be Annette or one of the other three abductees rescued along the way, your character has not had contact with any aliens prior to joining X-COM. Your story seems to indicate some rather...

Yes, you can say that. +10 internets for you for catching the reference.